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When the world around you feels so surreal
And you can't tell what's fake or for real
So you work your way through, trying to discover
And your memory's lost, so you're trying to recover

Feeling as if all the pages have flown
And wishing if only the world was clear and you'd known
But your brain is filled with plain morning dew
And is leaving you empty as the chilled wind blew
just a poem i wrote in class were we had to use 3 specific words and write it within 10min.

-picture found on google and not my own

-my other poems here:


***other version (which is better?):

When the world around you feels surreal
And you can't tell between fake and real
So you work your way through, trying to discover
And your memory's lost, so you're trying to recover

Feeling as if all the pages have flown
And wishing if only the world was clear and you'd known
But your brain is filled with plain morning dew
And is leaving you empty as the chilled wind blew
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:iconnwgroguerra:
NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
like the 2nd one more :D
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102vvv Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
hmm at this moment in time id have to agree ^_^
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:iconnwgroguerra:
NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
haha and in what moment you wouldn't agree?
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102vvv Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
when i originally wrote it xD lol i duno oppion changes due to mood and time =3
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:iconnwgroguerra:
NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah you are right on that one :aww: but the important is that you know what you where trying to say and grow from there.
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102vvv Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
practice makes perfect :D
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:iconnwgroguerra:
NwgroGuerra Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
exactly and you are doing just fine if I may say it so.
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102vvv Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
teehee well thank you very much ^__^
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PUSHER-ARTS Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011   Digital Artist
very nice idea
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102vvv Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you^^<3
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Sapphene Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
it's really hard to rhyme each line without sounding like a children's storybook sometimes, but this is really evocative and beautiful. I love the rhythm you managed to find with this piece. Really well done :D
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102vvv Featured By Owner Aug 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you^^<3
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FluffyBinLaden Featured By Owner May 2, 2011
Well done, this deserves a watch and a favorite. Nice rhymes. :)
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102vvv Featured By Owner May 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much!^^<3:hug:
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RainySkyz Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011   Writer
:heart: Love it! I know the feeling, too.
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you<3
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squimberrycupcake Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Very well written!! :D
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you<3
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squimberrycupcake Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
you're welcome! :D
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DeviousWitch Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Beautiful and truthful poem, i love it!:aww:
Your poems are very interesting and emotional, i can feel the way you felt when you were writing it, and that means you did a great job.:)
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much, im glad that you enjoyed them :)
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:icondeviouswitch:
DeviousWitch Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome!^^
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winwinsituation Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is amazing. :]
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:icon102vvv:
102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you<3
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winwinsituation Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your welcome!
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small-things Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
this is so great!!! i love it :love:
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you<3
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TrixbeeCassiGirl Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, I really enjoy your poems. Usually, I'm not a poems person, but this one I can actually understand and relate to. Good job captivating the audience too! Great work :D
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much^^<3
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Myrloenn Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2011  Student Interface Designer
I'm amazed that you wrote such awesomeness in ten minutes :) you've been featured here [link] :)
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
glad that you enjoyed it adn thank you very much for the feature<3
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enteringmymind Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very cool.:)
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you<3
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MissAllys Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011
i love this, and I prefer the first version because it seems more unknown : )
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you<3
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kalynvalcourt Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
This is beautiful :D I can relate to this...
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you<3
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kalynvalcourt Featured By Owner May 10, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Your very welcome :tighthug:
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13-3-L-I-3-V-3 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011
The second version of the poem is better. I still would like to see more surreality in a poem titled "The Surreal World". Just seems much to concrete for me.
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
hmm duno, i have a hard time with titles and after i wrote it, it just seemed to fit, im a beginer at poetry anyways
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Fangirl901 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
this is amazing! :love: :love:
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you very much:hug:
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Fangirl901 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
np :hug:
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TECHNlCOLOUR Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011  Student General Artist
Very nice, I can relate to this...
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102vvv Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you<3
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